Some types of paragraphs are actually blends of other types of paragraphs. One example are paragraphs that are written to justify some approach or perspective. In essence, these paragraphs often blend paragraphs that summarise drawbacks with paragraphs that define concepts.
Here is an example
The traditional model of lectures in which the lecturer summarises the key material within the lecture hall generates several complications. First, students can learn the material more efficiently by reading textbooks at home. Second, the activities in which supervision is most helpful—the application of this material—is completed at home without a supervisor. Third, the activities in which collaboration amongst peers is useful—also the application of this material—is completed alone. Consequently, many educators advocate the flipped classroom, in which students learn the material at home and apply the material in a classroom setting.
To write these paragraphs, follow these suggestions
Suggestions | Example |
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Write sentences that outlines the drawbacks of some approach, as discussed previously | The traditional model of lectures in which the lecturer summarises the key material within the lecture hall generates several complications. First, students can learn the material more efficiently by reading textbooks at home. Second, the activities in which supervision is most helpful—the application of this material—is completed at home without a supervisor. Third, the activities in which collaboration amongst peers is useful—the application of this material—is completed alone. |
Then, write sentences that resemble a paragraph that defines some approach or perspective, but in less depth than usual | Consequently, many educators advocate the flipped classroom, in which students learn the material at home and apply the material in a classroom setting. |
Exercise
10.1 Identify one or more examples in which you want to first denigrate other approaches to justify your approach—such as a theoretical perspective or method
Exercise
10.2 Utilise the previous suggestions to write a preliminary version of these paragraphs. That is
- indicate that many problems can unfold when some alternative method is used
- outline these problems
- then indicate that your approach solves these problems
- if you like, include or adapt relevant sentences you have already written
Improving these paragraphs
Exercise
10.3 Some readers are obsessed with grammar and vocabulary. So, to satisfy these readers, you need to write grammatically and use words correctly. For example, you need to know the difference between which, that, who, affect, and effect. To learn about these grammatical principles
- improve the sentences that appear in the left column of the following table
- the rationale appears in the middle column
- the solution appears in the right column
Incorrect sentence | Explanation | Corrected sentence |
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John Smith was a scholar that showed 1 = 2 |
| John Smith was a scholar who showed 1 = 2 |
The kangaroos which are in my backyard look appetising |
| The kangaroos that are in my backyard look appetising |
Coffee effects his mood |
| Coffee affects his mood |
The affect of coffee is enormous |
| The effect of coffee is enormous |
A own less shoes than her |
| A own fewer shoes than her |
A drank fewer beer than him |
| A drank less beer than him |
Purple is different than violet |
| Purple is different to violet |
A deck of cards includes four suits |
| A deck of cards comprises four suits |
A deck of cards comprises of four suits |
| A deck of cards consists of four suits |
The data was examined |
| The data were examined |
The data prove that people like carrots |
| The data indicate that people like carrots |
A child should be told they are special. |
| Children should be told they are special |
Exercise
This document summarises principles this program recommends. To improve the sentences you have written, apply all the recommendations that correspond to Levels 9 or below in this document |